Feedback From Jack McKibben:

Overview: 

I enjoyed the piece and its effectiveness at summarizing the facility’s history, current improvements, and future needs.

High Point: 

The concluding call for action was effective and clear, and a final close circling of context with Carson’s beliefs was effective. 

Q/Suggestion: 

Fix some cuts and finish visual elements.

Feedback From Wen Wadlington:

1. Write an overview comment that describes (“comes to terms with”) their project: what is the topic, approach, purpose and significance as they see it?

I think that Kayleigh uses the AIDA format very well in her project, including the call to action at the end being very effective. Additionally Kayleigh’s overall idea for the project very clearly falls in line with the spirit of a communications program, talking about something that is important to local communities, communicating that information, and then making a call to action at the end for how local community members can support the Rachel Carson preserve. I think that in a lot of ways Kayleigh is coming to terms with what she’s learned across her communication programs, the skills and techniques she’s learned in each of them, and translating that into a project which demonstrates the sort of skills that any communications major should learn by the time they graduate.

2. Highlight a high point and explain what you think is “working” there (in relation to your sense of the project’s aim and significance) and why.

I think that the content itself is the high point. It’s concise, engaging, and doesn’t stray from the topic. In terms of the actual script that Kayleigh’s written, I think that she’s created something very engaging.

3. Raise a question and/or make a specific suggestion for revision e.g., for clarity, for extending ideas, for challenging ideas, for connecting it to other sources. These are forwarding and countering moves. Be sure to explain why you’re asking your question or what you think might be gained if your peer pursued your suggestion.

I had some suggestions which we discussed aloud. I think that it might be worth talking to Dr. Cripps about getting a better quality microphone to borrow for her project, as well as slowing down the quote at the beginning so it rides over the clip she’s used a little bit more seamlessly.